Essay Analysis
Important Dates

Round 1

09/04/2024

Round 2

01/06/2025

2+2 Deadline

04/23/2025

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August 9, 2024

How to Write the HBS Business-Minded Essay

Please reflect on how your experiences have influenced your career choices and aspirations and the impact you will have on the businesses, organizations, and communities you plan to serve. (up to 300 words)

Bravo Harvard Business School: welcome to the ‘It’s okay to change your hairstyle once every decade or so!’ train! It’s been a while, but at last, we have a new essay prompt from the folks at HBS. If you’re applying for the second time, maybe this means something. If you’re a first-timer, you probably don’t (and shouldn’t) care. Let’s not waste time. There’s not to be gained by analyzing the change here. It changed. Rah. Let’s answer the question as effectively as possible shall we?

Three questions overall: one focused on ‘business,’ the next ‘leadership,’ and the third ‘growth.’ Sure, you can think of these as three discrete short answer essays, or, a better way, is to consider these three pieces of a whole that should ‘go together.’ How do these concepts relate? What does HBS hope to glean here? The answer is: who among you is the most likely to succeed in the coolest way (that confers a benefit to HBS)? And they’re looking to find clues based on tells inside three facets. The trick is to signal the right stuff in each of these three opportunities to raise HBS’s confidence level that you (1) have what it takes, (2) to succeed, (3) impressively, and (4) under the most challenging circumstances life (‘the business world’) has to throw your way.

Business-Minded Essay: Please reflect on how your experiences have influenced your career choices and aspirations and the impact you will have on the businesses, organizations, and communities you plan to serve. (up to 300 words)

For starters, let’s consider the word limit of 300. That tells you something. It’s three efficient paragraphs, or two meaty ones. That’s not exactly a lot of space to spin a yarn, so we need to get to the heart of it quickly, and effectively. Keeping in mind the context of the ‘business’ facet to the diamond of what makes you you, this question is a two-parter:

Part 1 - “What shaped you?”
Part 2 - “What shaping will you do?”

What shaped you?

(Won’t say it again, but just remember to couch everything here in the context of ‘business’: goals, skills, ideas, etc.) In order to address the elements that shaped you, you first need to understand what your shape even IS. What defines you today? How might you essentialize it? What skill sets make you you? What values differentiate you from someone with a similar skill set? What passions and interests of yours are unique compared to others who were subject to the same general ‘influences’? These are the endpoints. The ‘you’ today piece. Most applicants will fumble out of the gates by jumping straight to the “Ooh, I know my influences, I know the things that have shaped me, and they are these!” And at the end of it, we’ll have a delicious sense of what the ‘molding’ elements were, but have no real idea of what the pot looks like, so who cares.

Step 1: Begin by developing a clear sense of what defines you in a way that is distinctly different with others who are in the same pool with regard to your career interests and general profile stats.

Step 2: Answer the question: Why did you turn out THIS way, where the others in your pool turned out differently? (The answer here should lead you straight to ‘the experiences that have influenced your career choices and aspirations.’)

Once you’ve grappled with both those questions, now you can assemble it for your Part 1, but pause that for a second. Let’s peek ahead to the second half of the question, before we start actually writing.

What shaping will you do? (Almost…)

Using the parallel of how other people and experiences played a part in ‘shaping’ you, i.e., a thing (influencing element) having an impact on another thing (you), what is it you hope to achieve in the same way in your future business career?

Aha, see, this is why it’s critical to peek ahead. Before we identify what this is, we need to go back and address a missing “Step 3.” Let’s ride.

Step 3: Why does any of this matter to someone other than you?

Remember when you identified how you were different from your peer group? To be different (i.e., ‘differentiated’) is great! But we’ve only just completed the in-air somersaults - we still need to land this thing. Why was that important? To have turned out the way you did (differently) is better … why? Could be lots of things:

Example 1: Whereas you had just been effective at X, your ‘shaping elements’ allowed you to understand what ‘long-term’ success meant, and thus you became 10x more effective at X.

Example 2: Whereas you had an affinity for Y, your ‘shaping elements’ helped you develop one crucial feature called ‘resilience’ which meant that you would be able to succeed under high-pressure conditions, whereas you wouldn’t have otherwise.

Etc. etc. There’s a reason why the influences matter in a way we (the readers) can easily understand, and clock as noteworthy.

Okay, back to Part 2…

What shaping will you do? (Ready.)

So now that we have our three pieces, now we can look ahead to what delta it is you’re hoping to create, wherever you go, whatever you do. One of the best ways of teasing this out is to define what it is you’re hoping to do rather simply at first - just explain the what. Now imagine ten other incredibly competent individuals who might share that exact same goal, and possess the skills to be extremely effective. Seriously, imagine it, lean in. Imagine ten others do the thing you want to do, and they achieve an ‘Impact Score’ of 90-95 each. You, on the other hand, will pursue the same thing, but achieve an Impact Score of 100. What’s in that extra 5-10 points? You bring *what* to the table that create *what* kind of additional, important, impressive, desirable impact? This is easier said than done.

You need to dig deeper than you think to get to the nub of it.

Step 1: Define what success might look like for others.

Step 2: Now define what *your* version of success looks like.

Whatever separates your version from the ‘others’ version should give you clues to the piece regarding “the impact you will have on the businesses, organizations, and communities you plan to serve.” We’re only partially interested in what that impact is. We’re really interested in what that reveals about you and your potential for not just this pursuit, but any future pursuit. This is why we advise imagining the peer version, and then viewing your version side-by-side to isolate the piece of it that YOU are directly responsible for.

Once you have done all the legwork, and have all your piece, now you’re ready to assemble:

Part 1

    Define what makes you distinct. Essentialize what you’re all about.
    Connect this to your career choices and aspirations.
    Explain what factors (people, experiences, circumstances, etc.) contributed to the aspect of this that’s distinctly different from a peer’s version
    Capture why this delta is meaningful/noteworthy

Part 2

    Now explain what a ‘good’ ‘standard’ version of success might look like, given the aspirations you laid out in Part 1
    Now explain what might be missing from this, or what might boost it to a more meaningful level (the ‘impact’ piece)
    And why this makes it ‘better’
    Now connect how the influences that shaped you will help enable you leverage your own skills and ideas to deliver this ‘delta’ (impact).

That’ll get you an incredibly solid first draft. (And then the real fun begins!)

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August 8, 2024

Leadership-Focused Essay: What experiences have shaped who you are, how you invest in others, and what kind of leader you want to become? (up to 250 words)

Recall that our main objective for all three HBS essay prompts is too answer the question HBS is really asking which is “Who among you is the most likely to succeed in the coolest way (that confers a benefit to HBS)?” And that over the course of all three questions, you need to signal the right stuff in each of three contexts (business, leadership, and growth) to raise HBS’s confidence level that you (1) have what it takes, (2) to succeed, (3) impressively, and (4) under the most challenging circumstances life (‘the business world’) has to throw your way.

We primed the pump by establishing your business interests and skills and goals in Prompt 1. To over simplify, let’s suppose that HBS ticks one of three boxes by now: “This individual has a clear and compelling business vision, and the right skill set and background to succeed in this realm IN A VACUUM.” Think of a chef who has mastery over a particular food preparation, and the ingredients and tools at her disposal to execute. So far so good. But can this chef lead a team of people, under high octane, high pressure conditions? You might imagine two chefs equally capable of producing a single dish ‘in a vacuum,’ but perhaps only one possesses a new skill set (leadership) that enables harnessing the talents of a larger team. More variables, more volatility, it requires demonstrable aptitude along the dimension of leadership, near and dear to the HBS ethos. We return to the fundamental pieces of this question:

Part 1 - “What shaped you?”
Part 2 - “What shaping will you do?”

What shaped you?

This time, remember to couch everything here in the context of ‘leadership’: emotional IQ, people skills, command of a room, personal style, engendering trust, organizational skills, etc.) In order to address the elements that shaped you, you first need to understand what your ‘leadership’ shape is. What defines your leadership traits today? How might you essentialize it? What makes your style of leadership different from someone else who might lay claim to having led similar things, teams, etc.? How do people respond to you differently from another leader in a similar role? What tactics do you employ that differentiate you from others? These are the endpoints.

Step 1: Begin by developing a clear sense of what defines your leadership style in a way that is distinctly different from others who are in the same pool with regard to your career interests and general profile stats.

Step 2: Answer the question: Why did you turn out THIS way, where the others in your pool turned out differently? (The answer here should lead you straight to ‘who you are, how you invest in others.’)

Step 3: If there are many different ways to invest in others, what is your way, and why is this effective for you in particular, given your leadership style??

Understanding why you’re effective, and what elements may have helped contribute, is likely to make you better able to harness it and become more effective as you gain experience in leadership positions. Those who can identify these elements and articulate it all crisply, generally telegraph strength here, and this is precisely what HBS is trying to tease out.

What shaping will you do? (Almost…)

For the final piece, we need to cast the line out into the future. Think of it this way. When you imagine SUCCESS in your future endeavors, you might be able to say “my teams/the people under my leadership will have executed in this way to achieve this goal. Let’s give this a score of 100 out of 100. Whereas under another leader, it might not work at all, or if it did work, it would only get a score of, say, 70.” Why might your future teams perform more optimally/better? Trace it to some aspect of your leadership that explains it. What is it you’re doing effectively as a leader that all but guarantees successful outcomes, or gets the most out of the people you’re leading?

Now, what’s implied here is that you’re not necessarily ‘there’ yet, and that there’s plenty of room for you to grow. Important that you signal some humility here, which simultaneously gives HBS a reason to help get you from Point A to Point B.

By now, we’ve developed the raw ingredients of our short 250-word essay - (1) what factors helped shape the leadership features that are distinct to me, (2) insights into why I invest in others in this distinct way that reflects/suits my leadership style, and (3) where I’m hoping to get to as a future leader, and how this might play out in real life. Let’s see how we might organize this in a 250-word piece:

Part 1

    This is the leadership style that defines me specifically.
    Here’s an example of how others lead a similar situation, how I lead, and how the difference in my results speaks to my approach to leadership.
    These are the key factors (people, experiences, circumstances, etc.) that contributed to my leadership style.
    Here’s how I apply this when investing in other people.

Part 2

    This is where I’m hoping to GET to: this is a problem I’m hoping to solve, or a goal I’m hoping to achieve, that I’m unable to today for a variety of reasons, one of which is that I still have ‘leadership skills’ to develop.
    To build on these traits, and to learn these new other traits is to put me on the right path to achieving these types of aspirations smoothly and effectively.

150 words for Paragraph 1, 100 words Graf 2 and that’ll get you a solid first draft.

August 7, 2024

Growth-Oriented Essay: Curiosity can be seen in many ways. Please share an example of how you have demonstrated curiosity and how that has influenced your growth. (up to 250 words)

We’ve covered the business-minded and the leadership-focused pieces of the question: “Who among you is the most likely to succeed in the coolest way (that confers a benefit to HBS)?” By now, HBS may be satisfied that you have the right skill set and ideas to succeed here theoretically, but also your leadership credentials are convincing that you can do this in real life. The only remaining question is, how hungry are you, and can you think (and achieve) big? Enter the final piece of the puzzle: the growth-oriented dimension.

Many folks look at Everest and say, “Someday I shall conquer this mountain.” Some of these folks reach the top and say “Boom. I did it. Mission: Accomplished!” Others reach the top and say “Did it. High five! Now… where’s the ‘higher’ mountain I need to tackle next?” It’s being restless, relentless, all of the time. HBS isn’t looking for balanced individuals. Balanced individuals can be incredibly successful, but by and large they’re not changing the game. HBS is looking for the rare breed that might change the game. Restlessness and relentlessness are the keys. And underneath both is an ‘eternal flame’ of curiosity. Never being satisfied. “But why though.”

To convey this in a 250-word essay, let’s think about three steps:

Step 1: Think of an example where you’ve been curious about something, but in a restless and relentless way. A great version of this is to imagine peers being similarly curious but stopping short of where you eventually chased it….

Step 2: What is it about the subject itself, or the pursuit itself, that ignited something in you that made you want to ‘hit that lever’ repeatedly? Can you explain your growth story through attraction TO curiosity itself? “This was the result of my being curious and I liked how it felt.”

Step 3: Finally, carry this forward and suggest what this means for your appetite for future explorations. Show us how your relentlessness might play out.

The winning version of this third essay is not to deliver closure to the overall set of three essays. But perhaps to do the opposite. You want to channel your inner Soap Opera and leave HBS with the greatest cliffhanger of them all. A feeling that you are just beginning, on account of your never ending quest for… whatever it is. Whatever is turbo-charging your curiosity. The goal is to deliver that feeling of restlessness. So, work backwards from that endpoint goal to organize your response:

Part 1

    Story about how you tapped into something that was marked by curiosity, or revealed the value of being relentlessly curious.
    Focus not just on the ‘what’ (explanation of what happened) but also how it made you feel, how it energized and animated you and why, therefore, you want to ‘live’ here forever.
    Show us more evidence of how this is a pattern, and where else is appears in your life and career.

Part 2

    Finally, give us a sense for where this is taking you now, how this connects to the themes you established in the first two prompts, and leave us with questions you have and are dying to answer in the coming days. Show us the fuel that keep your ‘eternal flame’

150 words for Paragraph 1, 100 words Graf 2 and that’ll get you a solid first draft.

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