Essay Analysis
Important Dates
Single-Choice Early Action
11/01/2024
QuestBridge Match
11/01/2024
Regular Decision
01/02/2025
August 27, 2024
Applicants submitting the Coalition Application or Common Application will respond to one of the following prompts in 400 words or fewer.
1. Reflect on a time you discussed an issue important to you with someone holding an opposing view. Why did you find the experience meaningful?
This prompt assumes that you’re not just talking about an issue. A successful version of this essay will involve you being transformed by this discussion. You went in thinking ABC, and you left thinking XYZ, AND THEN, as a result of that new way of thinking, you took ACTION. A meaningful conversation doesn't just end when the words stop... it should lead to real, material changes in the things we do and the way that we live.
Note that a successful essay doesn't require you to have been convinced by your interlocutor. Perhaps you became even more strongly convinced of your position! So long as that resulted in you DOING something different than you would have otherwise, we're on the right track.
There should to be some element of “surprisingness” or “unusualness” to the debate. It can either be the idea or topic itself… or the conclusion you came to. One exercise you can use (not that you’d say this necessarily in your essay, more like, something you do on the side in draft-mode…) is to say “whereas many people are believe X because of A B or C, my interest is a little different. You see… blah blah blah.”
Here's one possible approach to this essay:
- Before – Start with your position before this conversation. What did you think about the issue, and why was it important to you?
- Discussion – You are challenged by someone who disagrees with you. Often, this will be most effective if there are excellent arguments on both sides. There's no room for strawmen here: the stronger your interlocutor's argument, the stronger the essay.
- After – How did your thinking change? What did you DO as a result of that change?
Hit all three of these pieces, and you’re on your way to a solid first draft.
2. Reflect on your membership in a community to which you feel connected. Why is this community meaningful to you? You may define community however you like.
A cool one. But not so easy. First of all, we need to know what your community is, and depending on what that is, an explanation for how you define it. If it’s self-explanatory, no need. But if you define your community in an unconventional way, help us understand how that came to be.
Next up is this idea of "meaningfulness". This is all about the “delta.” Imagine "you" if you had never been a part of this community. Now, imagine the real-life version of you, where you are deeply immersed. Now, the fun part: How are those two pictures different? This is the coolest way to isolate how this community shaped you.
Then flip the thought experiment on its head: What does the community look like without you? What's the delta there? Think of a dilemma, or issue, or something, that this community would have dealt with had they not known you. Imagine what they’d say, how they’d react, how they would decide, how they would grapple with it, etc. Now imagine how they would deal with that exact same issue TODAY, given your contribution to this community, and the community's contribution to you. How is this second version different? Why is it better? What led to this difference? We must understand the delta in a way that’s similar to this to understand the meaningful connection between you and this community.
It should be the case that, without this community, you wouldn't be... you. If we can convey that feeling, this essay is a success.
3. Reflect on an element of your personal experience that you feel will enrich your college. How has it shaped you?
This is the wildcard "do whatever you want" option. There are a lot of potential paths with a prompt like this, and plenty of pitfalls. The prompt does provide some guardrails though. Let's break them down:
- "AN element of your personal experience" – Meaning ONE thing. Don't try and fit a half dozen extracurricular in this essay under a vague theme like "my personal experience with adversity." This essay will benefit from focus: one extracurricular, one family member, one experience, one moment, etc.
- "How has it shaped you?" – Similar to our discussion of "meaningfulness" in the prior prompts, this is all about delta. The essay should show us "you" before and after the experience, and the difference between the two. That difference is how this experience shaped you.
- "that you feel will enrich your college" – Don't forget to make this connection! An experience may have dramatically changed your life, but if it didn't change you in a way that will be evident and beneficial to your classmates, it's not a suitable answer for this prompt.
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August 27, 2024
Three short answers from Yale:
1. Students at Yale have time to explore their academic interests before committing to one or more major fields of study. Many students either modify their original academic direction or change their minds entirely. As of this moment, what academic areas seem to fit your interests or goals most comfortably? Please indicate up to three from the list provided.
2. Tell us about a topic or idea that excites you and is related to one or more academic areas you selected above. Why are you drawn to it? (200 words or fewer)
3. What is it about Yale that has led you to apply? (125 words or fewer)
So, the first is straightforward, on purpose. Just… indicate… which areas light you up the most? Cool. The next part is where things get interesting. And there’s a giant clue in the prompt to help you nail this, but you gotta look carefully…
Yale assumes (as they should) that your interests will evolve, and probably change altogether. That’s their hope anyway. After all, they’re not a trade school, taking your proficiency in one thing, and advancing it along an exact, fixed trajectory. If they do their job correctly, by exposing you to different types of students from different walks of life, who have different perspectives, along with a wide array of courses and activities … they hope that that will all sum up to blowing your mind. The whole point is to expand your horizons until you’re poised to pursue… anything, even if it’s different from what you thought it might be back when you were a senior, applying.
So, why go through all that? Because the key isn’t to sell them on your interest in the areas themselves, but rather, the significance of that interest. What’s the underlying itch that interest is scratching? That’s what we wanna learn more about – the part that persists even if that surface interest were to look a little different in a few years. When you talk about your interest in Global Affairs or Cognitive Science or Music or … whatever… you need to talk about it abstractly enough that were your “subject” interests to change, your ultimate reasoning stays intact, because the itch can be applied to many things, the itch is “scalable.” What they really need to be convinced of is that your interest in learning writ large won’t flame out.
In the third piece, the part about “Why Yale,” you need to come up with reasons that aren’t obvious. “Anyone” would wanna attend Yale, because, it’s Yale, right? Think about it this way… if you were to get accepted to Harvard and Stanford and Princeton, why might you choose Yale over those? What aspects of Yale have convinced you that the combination of You + Yale is more appealing than You + Harvard, or You + Stanford, etc.? Be specific. Be authentic. Your reasoning may even be irrational, emotional, based on gut. The one thing it can’t be is applicable to other folks as well. It’s gonna be some kind of sacred (anticipated) connection between you and Yale.
Applicants submitting the Coalition Application or Common Application will also respond to the following short answer questions, in no more than 200 characters (approximately 35 words):
1. What inspires you?
Remember, 35 words is a sentence, or two. This isn’t the time to be cute, or burn time on clever setups. The challenge here is to laser into the thing itself, fast. Try to capture both what inspires you, and what that means. X thing has Y impact on me. Or, X thing inspires me to do Y thing differently or in this particular way. You get the idea.
2. If you could teach any college course, write a book, or create an original piece of art of any kind, what would it be?
Give us the blurb or catalogue entry for your project. When we say “blurb” we mean to explain it in terms like “course/book/art will examine BLAH BLAH.” Some advice: make sure what you're proposing doesn't already exist? You especially want to avoid talking about a course here that is already taught at Yale. Also, make sure your project would be of interest and value to someone other than yourself. A very cool version would be something that seems fresh but also obvious, where we go “Wow, of course, sold.” Given that we don't have space to explain in detail, ideas that require detailed explanation need not apply.
3. Other than a family member, who is someone who has had a significant influence on you? What has been the impact of their influence?
Please don’t pick an obvious person for an obvious reason. You can do a bizarre/interesting person and for an obvious reason, or an obvious person and for a bizarre/interesting reason. But not obvious-obvious. As for the impact of their influence... they mean action! How did this person's example change what you have DONE. If this person's influence didn't result in changes in your behavior, then the impact likely isn't sufficient.
4. What is something about you that is not included anywhere else in your application?
This prompt by nature will be very unique to you and your application. The key idea here is to remember that this question is not a garbage bin. Don't throw something in here that didn't earn it's place anywhere else, just to be comprehensive. This is not the place to include "I did debate in freshman and sophomore year but quit because I wasn't good at it." If an extracurricular doesn't merit more than 35 words, it probably doesn't need to be on your application at all.
Instead, focus here on FUN. This short answer might not be long enough to explain an achievement of yours, but it certainly is enough room to convey some aspect of your personality and sense of humor. Being funny is no joke: being adcom member can be very boring work. A single chuckle is worth at least 50 points on the SAT.
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